I've recently been busy with college (seems pretty exciting to say ) but my english paper seems to be a mess. I'm confident in the structure and my own personal writing, just not on the subject itself. I have to pick a commercial ( I chose the Sprint Flashlight commercial, you can look it up and watch it if you wanna help) and I have to create a persuasive arguement about it. My arguement is that this particular commercial is misleading and deciving because of various reasons ( if you wanna help you'll be able to look at my essay and see what those reasons are)*kinda makes you wanna read it huh? * and well I turned in a Shitty rough Draft (literally, I titled it Shitty Rough Draft) she didnt mind. but she had a big long comment about my paper rather than just marking red ( or in her case blue) on where ever my mistakes are. so please please help. I dont want you to write the essay for me, no. I just want feedback that'll give me at least a 200 out of 250 on this essay.
I REALLy appreciate anyone that'll help before my deadline